Before:It was very cold out side and so was I.
After:My teeth where chatering I couldent feel my fingers
K.E.B
I WAS SAW ITSIDED AS I WALKED TO THE LIVING ROOM I PICKED ONE UP
As I opened my eyes it was pitch black.As the burst of cold air hit me I shivered
BEFOR I WALKED IN THE LIVIING ROOM I SAW THE PRASENT'S
AFTER I WAS SAW ITSIDED AS I WALIKED TO THE LIVEING ROOM I SAW ALL YHE PRASENT I PICKED ONE UP
K.M.B.
Before:I didn't even eat my macaroni and cheese.
After:As I was walking into the kitchen I didn't even eat my macaroni and chesse.
M.L.
Before:I went outside in the frontyard to play with the snow.
After:As I turned around BOOM my cousin threw a snowball at me.
Before:we went n a cool roller coster
After:we went up and down and around and around
12 comments:
Before:It was very cold out side and so was I.
After:My teeth where chatering I couldent feel my fingers
K.E.B
I WAS SAW ITSIDED AS I WALKED TO THE LIVING ROOM I PICKED ONE UP
As I opened my eyes it was pitch black.As the burst of cold air hit me I shivered
Before:we went n a cool roller coster
After:we went up and down and around and around
M.L.
Before:I went outside in the frontyard to play with the snow.
After:As I turned around BOOM my cousin threw a snowball at me.
Before:I didn't even eat my macaroni and cheese.
After:As I was walking into the kitchen I didn't even eat my macaroni and chesse.
BEFOR I WALKED IN THE LIVIING ROOM I SAW THE PRASENT'S
AFTER I WAS SAW ITSIDED AS I WALIKED TO THE LIVEING ROOM I SAW ALL YHE PRASENT I PICKED ONE UP
K.M.B.
it was the first day of school i was nervous.
BH
it was the first day of shcool i starded to tremble.
BEFOR I SAW ALL THE PRASENT'S
AFTER I WHENT TO THE LIVEING ROOM I SAW ALL THE PRASENT'S I THOGHT WE GET TO OPEN THIM
Before:When I went to the bus stop it was so cold it felt like the artic I had to wear two jakets.
DD
Before:The Christmas light was bright.It kept on shinning on me.
After:I was jumping up and down.I can't wait to open my present.
M.L.
s.l. befor;I was in the house eat and playing. after; I was in my house laying in my bed ween i smelt food wal i was playing. s.l.
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